my first mythos story- INTERSTELLAR OBLIVION

[yogsototh]

INTERSTELLAR OBLIVION

2078- Global Space Administration Starship "GEHENNA"

Captain Seth Kraken Personal log:

I am ready to launch from Orbital Station Omega 1 for a test run of the Gehenna's gravity drive, which if successful, will fold the space/ time continuum, and instantaneously transport the ship to the co-ordinates we set for it in the known Universe. Co-ordinates have been set for a trajectory to Pluto - the ship is fully automated, and I am here only to determine the effects of the gravity drive on human beings. There is excitement and apprehension that my fate lies in the hands of the A.I. onboard computer system. Launch sequence will commence in 5 minutes.
End Log Entry

Docking ports released. I can feel the gravity drive building up to event horizon status. One minute to full power. A new new era in space travel is about to be realized.

Gravity drive initiated...I feel nothing, however the ship itself appears to be morphing, everything around me seems to be distorted and in slow motion.
My head is starting to hurt, a sharp driving pain...

Have awakened on the ship floor, must have blacked out. Checking A.I. for telemetry...success! I am 5000 miles out from pluto, and the sight of it in the viewscreen is breathtaking. Launching probe to scan the planet and collect data before the automated return to earth in 20 minutes.

Probe transmitting data...appears to be synthesized metals of unknown properties on the surface, also detecting biological lifeforms. Could these lifeforms be sentient? Is it possible?.

External ship sensors now detecting multiple targets ascending from the surface, classification: biological! My thoughts are racing now, out of nowhere an absurd thought comes into my head: could these beings be the fictitious Mi-go of the Lovecraftian Mythos, and could not the planet we call Pluto be Yuggoth? I must calm down and get a hold of myself, have to focus.

Priority 1 alert from A.I.- the gravity drive has malfunctioned! The drive has activated ahead of schedule and the co-ordinates have been altered. They are no longer set for return to Earth but for some unknown destination. The new co-ordinates are showing up as some sort of strange cryptical symbols which I don't recognize. Again my thoughts regress to the Lovecraftian mythos. All attempts at manual overdrive have failed, I am helpless.

Biological targets are now close enough to the ship for visual inspection. SWEET JESUS! The computer enhanced image shows winged creatures who more than anything resemble crustaceons- THE MI-GO! What in the Hell is going on here? Have I lost my mind? Am I hallucinating? The creatures are constantly changing color like chameleons, the ship is surrounded by them.

The A.I. mainframe database has just activated itself, all information inside is being analysed. What the?..upload in progress? Dear God that data base contains the cumulative knowledge of human kind; our technology, our military strength, our genetic code... THIS CAN'T BE HAPPENING!

Gravity drive activated..approaching event horizon..

Woke up on the floor again. A.I. coming back online, trying to determine co-ordinates. No data available. Switching to visual. This is impossible, there is nothing, only blackness, no stars, nothing at all, hold on... picking up the winged creatures still surrounding the ship, where have they taken me? Long range sensors have identified an object 2 million miles away, enhancing sensors, will try to get a visual.

Receiving visual..this thing is MAMMOTH, sensors cannot get a concise reading on what it is. The object seems to change from solid to liquid to gaseous form, the only thing the sensors can tell me is that this thing has altered its course and is now headed directly for me at an incredible speed.

I can hear a voice inside my head, the thing is communicating with me- " I AM YOG SOTHOTH, THE LURKER OF THE THRESHOLD, THE BEYOND ONE. MY MINIONS HAVE BROUGHT YOU HERE TO MY REALM, AND HAVE TRANSFERRED TO ME ALL OF HUMANITY'S KNOWLEDGE. NO LONGER WILL I HAVE TO WAIT TO BE SUMMONED, FOR YOU, HUMANKIND IN YOUR BLIND ARROGANCE HAVE CREATED THE GATEWAY, WHAT YOU CALL THE EVENT HORIZON, AND NOW THE OLD ONES SHALL RISE AGAIN FOR IT IS YOU WHO HAS MADE THE TIME RIGHT!

Must do something..trying to activate the self-destruct, must destroy the event horizon before it's too late! A.I. will not respond, gravity drive powering up, event horizon in 1 minute. Evil laughter resounding in my head, my body is frozen now, I can feel my life draining away, I have condemned mankind to destruction...

Event horizon in 3 seconds, 2, 1......

END

I would greatly appreciate any feedback on this story

[nortonew]

It was a pretty cool story.

However, in Whisperer in the Darkness, the Mi-Go seem to have a great deal of trouble just getting at some old farmer who is hiding in his house with a shotgun and some dogs.

Taking over an advanced spaceship so easily seems a little beyond their normal range of powers.

Of course, maybe they've advanced technologically along with humanity...

[Aleister]

Although short, I found it interesting.

The main thing I felt was that the mythos references should not of shown up until much later in the story, or even not at all. Sometimes its best to let the reader realize the connection themself