The Temple of Dagon

I know I'm new, but I figure I could ask for a little feedback. This is also my first attempt at a strictly HPL-esque story. I have written some other stuff before, but mostly failed attempts at scifi. Hey, why not ask what you think of the writing style.


Edit: removed. Thanks for any feedback.

Ulayoth wrote:They required a place to hold their obscene rituals and sacrifices; their gods were numerous, and reputedly were from similar religions to theirs yet masked and renamed to suit their own puposes and culture.

it's hard to understand who you mean by the multiple instances of "their" in this sentence.

Grendelvs wrote:

Ulayoth wrote:They required a place to hold their obscene rituals and sacrifices; their gods were numerous, and reputedly were from similar religions to theirs yet masked and renamed to suit their own puposes and culture.

it's hard to understand who you mean by the multiple instances of "their" in this sentence.

Thanks.