The Library of Sand (working title)

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Tindalos
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Well upon reading the beginning I notice a stellar characterization, nice plot, but the writing itself could use some excitement. Not for content, but for fluency. All in all it was great work.
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Hello, Tindalos. Welcome aboard.
Can I just ask you to resize your avatar? I didn't realise there were no size limits on it, but I'd say 150 x 150 would be about right.
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Yah thats gonna b a pain in the old ass
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