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A very, very short story, "Faith vs. Knowledge"

Posted: Sat Dec 03, 2005 5:51 pm
by Secret3
In that twilight between idol rest and pure, deep slumber I was awakened by a sudden and terrible impression; I was not alone.

My eyes opened as my heart leapt in my chest- adrenaline surged through my veins. Was it something from a vague impression that was not quite yet a dream? I felt a voice in my head that seemed alien. I felt a presence in my room,.

"I know you're there!" I shouted in a cracking voice, trying to sound bold and certain, though I was anything but certain, and feeling far from bold.

No sooner had I spoken when the thought entered my head, "No, you don't. You don't know anything is there."

I listened quietly, only silence. My eyes searched, but only blackness could be found. The pounding in my veins constricted my throat- I began to hear the ringing in my ears and feel my chest pounding, and in my mind I asked myself, "Why am I afraid?"

The answer came to my thoughts, "Because you believe that you sensed a presence."

"Ah," my mind retorted, "but you don't actually know that there is anything there?"

"Well, no," I answered myself silently, "I couldn't actually know something based solely on intuition. I would need to sense it in a physical way to actually know it. I would have to see it, or feel it, or hear it..."

"...and so now you know..." came the raspy voice from the dark...

Posted: Sat Dec 03, 2005 5:59 pm
by Jesus Prime
Odd.

Posted: Sat Dec 03, 2005 6:00 pm
by Aleister
Yes odd.. but interesting :)

Posted: Sat Dec 03, 2005 6:04 pm
by Jesus Prime
I'd try to expand it into a fuller musing on instinct and learning, but I'm too lazy.

Posted: Thu Jan 05, 2006 6:38 pm
by gorgliat
hey, I think this form of storytelling is compelling. Very Lovecraftian:-) But I think you should work some more on it. You have a theme, right. A guy is frightened, but of what. Is it unknown to us all? What happens, does he investigate?

Posted: Fri Apr 14, 2006 9:20 pm
by Enkil
As I was reading I really didn't care for it much, to be honest. THEN the last line came, and I couldn't keep down the biggest grin I've had in 2 years. Excellent story.

Posted: Mon Aug 09, 2010 9:51 pm
by mbtshoes
Although the story is short ,so charming

Posted: Thu Aug 19, 2010 3:31 am
by mobme30
Odd.
I think you should work some more on it. You have a theme, right. A guy is frightened, but of what. Is it unknown to us all?

Posted: Sun Oct 10, 2010 9:05 pm
by DELETED
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