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 A very, very short story, "Faith vs. Knowledge"
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Secret3
PostPosted: Sat Dec 03, 2005 5:51 pm
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In that twilight between idol rest and pure, deep slumber I was awakened by a sudden and terrible impression; I was not alone.

My eyes opened as my heart leapt in my chest- adrenaline surged through my veins. Was it something from a vague impression that was not quite yet a dream? I felt a voice in my head that seemed alien. I felt a presence in my room,.

"I know you're there!" I shouted in a cracking voice, trying to sound bold and certain, though I was anything but certain, and feeling far from bold.

No sooner had I spoken when the thought entered my head, "No, you don't. You don't know anything is there."

I listened quietly, only silence. My eyes searched, but only blackness could be found. The pounding in my veins constricted my throat- I began to hear the ringing in my ears and feel my chest pounding, and in my mind I asked myself, "Why am I afraid?"

The answer came to my thoughts, "Because you believe that you sensed a presence."

"Ah," my mind retorted, "but you don't actually know that there is anything there?"

"Well, no," I answered myself silently, "I couldn't actually know something based solely on intuition. I would need to sense it in a physical way to actually know it. I would have to see it, or feel it, or hear it..."

"...and so now you know..." came the raspy voice from the dark...

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PostPosted: Sat Dec 03, 2005 5:59 pm
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Odd.

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PostPosted: Sat Dec 03, 2005 6:00 pm
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Yes odd.. but interesting Smile

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Jesus Prime
PostPosted: Sat Dec 03, 2005 6:04 pm
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I'd try to expand it into a fuller musing on instinct and learning, but I'm too lazy.

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PostPosted: Thu Jan 05, 2006 6:38 pm
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hey, I think this form of storytelling is compelling. Very Lovecraftian:-) But I think you should work some more on it. You have a theme, right. A guy is frightened, but of what. Is it unknown to us all? What happens, does he investigate?

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PostPosted: Fri Apr 14, 2006 9:20 pm
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As I was reading I really didn't care for it much, to be honest. THEN the last line came, and I couldn't keep down the biggest grin I've had in 2 years. Excellent story.

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PostPosted: Mon Aug 09, 2010 9:51 pm
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Although the story is short ,so charming

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PostPosted: Thu Aug 19, 2010 3:31 am
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Odd.
I think you should work some more on it. You have a theme, right. A guy is frightened, but of what. Is it unknown to us all?

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